It was FULL OF MOMENTS.
Things happened "after a long moment". Repeatedly. People paused "for a moment". Also repeatedly. "A moment later", other things happened, or lasted for just that wretched "moment".
Ye gods and little fishes. I was reading out out loud and these moments jumped out at me and walloped me with tiny sledgehammers.
I dealt with it. i DEALT with it, okay? I'm not momentless, but there are certainly considerably fewer of them than there were, and we're all the better for it. I don't know what happened, don't ask. I'm just glad I read this puppy out loud; I probably WOULD have noticed the problem later, in edits, but I'm just as glad it's been fixed now.
For those keeping track of such things, I am now four chapters away from the end of Book 3 of Worldweavers. The first draft of it, that is. Oh, I'll probably have to go back and perform another momentectomy or two - but I can smell the end now, it's just around the corner.
With overseas houseguests arriving at our place on Wednesday night, and various other chores requiring attention between now and then, it doesn't look likely that I'll get to the next chapter before next Thursday at the earliest - but if I can put pedal to the metal and actually sit down and WORK at this, I can probably commit to doing one decent chapter per two or three days. Which means that I can get this book finished in about two weeks and change. Wish me luck.
Oh, and in other news... you're looking at the new Secretary for the Board of Directors of SFWA.